Morning Burst
Ceiling
lights beam down.
Tired eyes of students collapse,
Energy drinks please.
Tired eyes of students collapse,
Energy drinks please.
The
Fallen
Winds fill the tree tops;
So graceful, but time runs out.
Bam! Bye,bye birdie.
Scarred
Pain of the needle;
So young, the ink marks my skin.
Remove this tattoo.
My favourite Haiku that you wrote was the last one, regarding tattoo's. It really reflects life; in the sense that when you're young, you make decisions based on the present, not necessarily thinking too far in the future, and sometimes the decisions you make now, can affect your whole future.
ReplyDeleteI particularly like Morning Burst, it reminds me of just about everyday of going to school. One thing though, I think the first line kind of takes away a bit from the second and third lines and I feel like it's a little out of place but the idea of it works. If that makes any sense.
ReplyDeleteThese haikus are solid! I really enjoy the first one because its a mirro image of what happens to me while im sitting in my morning class.The las tine "Energy drinks please" is the line that makes the haiku really effective beacause I'm always lacking energy in the morning due to lack of sleep and late assignments due the next morning. Great job! Keep up te good work!
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